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“Come on everyone line up” We were lining up to go and do are show. Fancy man was so funny because he said “That girl is pretty hot up there” it made everybody laugh even the parents next,us the zombies my Mum and Dad were there on tuesday night and they said that they were very imprest but I guess that's what they all say.We held it at the school hall and the howl tuakana team was in the production.After the production everyone went into room 13 and all the parents had to try and steal their kids back.
i like how you included speech in your story it made it more immersive. i also found it funny when he said that girls pretty hot up there next time maybe you could add more detail and use thing like show not tell or tell us more about what was going on in room 13
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